Good stuff. The paragraph starting with "The moment that he stepped out of the caravan..." is beautifully written. I have to ask, though: what's with the substack blockquotes? They seem somewhat arbitrarily placed.
Ah man, thanks for that. Really appreciate it. As for the block quotes -- I wanted to try something different, to focus in on or harness the paragraphs that has dialogue in them. I wanted to play around with fonts but couldn’t get it to work so I tried that out instead, something to distinguish it from the writing in other newsletters.
Gotcha! I thought so, but then I'd edit and make sure you add these two paragraphs to the first blockquote for consistency:
Willa’s heart leaped. Then it fell, sinking back down deep into the recesses of her chest. It was an uncomfortable feeling, close to despair, and she didn’t like it, she didn’t want it, it felt like a betrayal to her husband who had been gone for so long.
“Okay…” Willa replied, drawing a deep breath as she answered. “Let us go prepare to meet him.”
When I saw this line of dialogue outside of the block, I questioned if that wasn't what they were about....
Cool. I will take another look at it. I think there’s a better way to get the experience I want than the block quotes. I’ll look into it and revise. Thanks for reading it and your feedback.
That’s awesome, Dave. Thanks for that -- Jerry’s a great guy and works very hard for GNOSIS and what we are trying to build independently. Thanks for letting him know.
Excellent story! I look forward to reading the rest of it. Is your process for writing prose similar or different to comics? If you don’t mind me asking. Thanks for another great newsletter!
Hey Devin! Thanks for the kind words, glad that you enjoyed the first part of WILLA. As for the process, it really depends on the story and length. My outline, if I do one, for a short story is more of a short summary at times. Then, sometimes, it’s broken into three parts -- beginning, middle, and end. Longer prose, I do by chapter as an outline after I do a full synopsis.
Good stuff. The paragraph starting with "The moment that he stepped out of the caravan..." is beautifully written. I have to ask, though: what's with the substack blockquotes? They seem somewhat arbitrarily placed.
Ah man, thanks for that. Really appreciate it. As for the block quotes -- I wanted to try something different, to focus in on or harness the paragraphs that has dialogue in them. I wanted to play around with fonts but couldn’t get it to work so I tried that out instead, something to distinguish it from the writing in other newsletters.
Gotcha! I thought so, but then I'd edit and make sure you add these two paragraphs to the first blockquote for consistency:
Willa’s heart leaped. Then it fell, sinking back down deep into the recesses of her chest. It was an uncomfortable feeling, close to despair, and she didn’t like it, she didn’t want it, it felt like a betrayal to her husband who had been gone for so long.
“Okay…” Willa replied, drawing a deep breath as she answered. “Let us go prepare to meet him.”
When I saw this line of dialogue outside of the block, I questioned if that wasn't what they were about....
Cool. I will take another look at it. I think there’s a better way to get the experience I want than the block quotes. I’ll look into it and revise. Thanks for reading it and your feedback.
Also: love that logo. I found his FB page and made sure to let him know, too :)
That’s awesome, Dave. Thanks for that -- Jerry’s a great guy and works very hard for GNOSIS and what we are trying to build independently. Thanks for letting him know.
Excellent story! I look forward to reading the rest of it. Is your process for writing prose similar or different to comics? If you don’t mind me asking. Thanks for another great newsletter!
Hey Devin! Thanks for the kind words, glad that you enjoyed the first part of WILLA. As for the process, it really depends on the story and length. My outline, if I do one, for a short story is more of a short summary at times. Then, sometimes, it’s broken into three parts -- beginning, middle, and end. Longer prose, I do by chapter as an outline after I do a full synopsis.
Thanks for the reply! I really appreciate that and the glimpse into your process.